Koizumi Ren

           
           
             
           
       
     

Koizumi Ren                   "My strength is that of every warrior who I have helped stand to fight another day." Basic Information: Name: Koizumi Ren Age: 296 Age Appearance: 21 Gender: Male Affiliation: Gotei 13 Division: Fourth Rank: Appearance: Ren stands at 5'11" with a lithe, yet slightly defined body.  His dark brown hair is mostly feathered and shoulder length, except the bottom layer, which is drawn into a long ponytail reaching a mere twelve inches above the ground when he is standing.  Though Ren's eyes are dark brown, his right eye appears cloudy due to the fact that he is completely blind in his right eye. Ren generally wears a standard Shinigami Shihakusho, with the 4th Division armband always displayed, despite that it is rarely required. Personality: Koizumi avoids conflict whenever possible, preferring to use words and tactical retreats in non-lethal situations.  He is generally soft spoken and is worrisome when others put themselves in dangerous situations. Koizumi also possesses a desire to protect others from harm, even at a moment's notice.  In the event that he must face a deadly opponent, his personality flips completely.  In such situations, Koizumi's kind and pacifist demeanor is replaced with that of a stoic guardian lacking any merciful inhibition. Outside of battle, Koizumi is generally outwardly cheerful, believing that happiness was vital to good health.  His desire to be helpful to others often wears him out, devoting more time to others than himself. Your Legacy: Character Story: When Koizumi arrived in Rukongai, he quickly realized his potential Reiatsu when he encountered the disparaging amount of injured people in the more neglected districts.  His desire to help treat the dying led to his discovery of a strange power to heal injuries with his own willpower.  With this ability, Koizumi traveled across Rukongai to aid those afflicted by the lack of crime control in the distant districts. Koizumi later learned that his ability was a very basic, unstructured form of healing Kido.  It was his desire to improve this skill for the sake of helping others that brought him to the Shinigami Academy in the Seireitei. It was during those six years in which Koizumi's dual personality awakened. In a confrontation with several bullies harassing a female student, Koizumi attacked them in a blind rage, using far more violent force than was necessary. Had the female student not spoken in his defense, Koizumi's inability to control himself could have led to severe consequences.  This caused Koizumi to shift his focus onto self-discipline, as his obsession with Kido had blinded him from many important aspects of a Shinigami's duties. After several difficult years, Koizumi did manage to graduate, and apply to join the Fourth Division of the Gotei 13... RP Sample: Koizumi turns through the corridor and stops, looking at the backs of three male academy uniforms. "Why would you wanna join the Fourth Division?  What a waste of time!" "What, you like running around, doing chores and cleaning?" "Heh, I guess even a Shinigami woman is still just a woman!" Cornered in front of them is a female student, two years younger than the boys.  She can't seem to find the words to fight back, and her eyes dart around looking for a way out. "Actually," Koizumi interjects, "the Fourth Division is also responsible for the medical needs of Shinigami who are injured in battle.  Don't you think that it's important to keep our warriors alive and in good health?" The tallest student scoffs and smiles wryly.  "Ain't no good keeping a Shinigami around who can't even keep himself alive.  If he can't hold his own, he might as well be dead anyway." he responds. Koizumi walks over to the wall and places a hand on the man to push him aside.  "Well, you're entitled to your opinion, but that's no reason to harass this young lady."  Koizumi attempts to move him out of the way, but he refuses to budge.  A fist flies at Koizumi's face, which he catches with ease.  His feels his blood boil and his face heat with rage as the world turns black. --- "BAKUDO ONE!  SAI!" --- Koizumi's vision slowly returns.  The surrounding world is blurred, but he can make out three bodies.  They are breathing, but their arms and legs are bent in places they shouldn't be, and they are covered in blood.  Koizumi's arms are locked painfully behind his back by an intangible force. He recognizes the simple Kido binding spell, but can't find the energy to fight it.  He can hear a girl sobbing, and the footsteps of someone walking near him.  As he strains to look up, a captain's uniform looms in front of his vision as it goes dark before he can see who is wearing it. Powers & Abilities: {To be able to use technique, Shikai and Bankai, knowledge and know how must be acquired in-game) Zanpakutō: Zanpakuto Spirit Description: A tall, fair-skinned woman with short, back-length blonde hair.  Her body is adorned completely in wilted plant life, leaving only her hands, feet, forearms, and calves bare.  The nails on her right hand extend an inch from her fingertips and are pointed razor sharp.  Her eyes are covered by a red cloth tied around her head. Zanpakuto Name: Ryomen no Bara Inner World: An endless forest, in which the sun is completely blotted out by the canopy.  The only source of light is a crystal shining at the center.  Aside from this clearing, the forest ground is covered entirely in thorny brush that gets thicker farther away from the light. Sealed Appearance: A katana with a rose-shaped tsuba.  The leaves below the petals wrap around and become the sword's grip. Shikai Name: Ryomen no Bara (Two-Faced Rose) Shikai Release Phrase: Join darkness and light into one! Released Appearance: The petals on the guard scatter into the air, and the leaves wrap around the entirety of the blade, creating an impenetrable sheath around it. Shikai Special Ability: The leaf sheath prevents the blade from being used to cut, but it is strengthened and can be used to defend against powerful attacks.  The sword is used with Kido to direct the petals, which have two forms: black to absorb Reishi, and white to expel Reishi.  The black petals can absorb Reishi from the environment, or be used to attack by absorbing the Reishi of spiritual beings' bodies.  By switching the petals to white, the absorbed Reishi can be expelled as an attack, or used to restore the bodies of other spiritual beings.  The petals are extremely lightweight, and their flight is easily interrupted.  There is a limit to how much Reishi the petals are able to take in.  If this limit is surpassed, the black petals turn white and explode. Bankai Name: Sodaina Barasono (Grand Rose Garden) Bankai Release Phrase: Bloom grandly, and pull at the threads of life and death! Released Appearance: The Zanpakuto is thrust into the ground up to its guard.  Two large vines erupt from the ground on both sides, blooming with white roses on the right, and black roses on the left.  The blooms explode into a flurry of petals. Bankai Special Ability: In addition to having a much larger number of petals, they now can be used in any combination of black and white, which allows Koizumi to absorb and release Reishi in a constant flow.  This allows for a wide variety of battle and non-battle applications.  Without his sword, Koizumi is largely defenseless, and must rely on tactical use of the rose petals to protect himself. Abilities (Max 12, you can add/unlock as you progress, but to be able to use technique, you must acquire it in-game) Name: Kaido (Turn Way) State: All Terms of Usage: Kido Ability Description: Kaido is a type of Kido which is used to facilitate healing of spiritual beings. Downside: Kaido utilizes the practitioner's own Reishi, and can exhaust him if it is overused. Name: Shunpo (Flash Step) State: All Terms of Usage: Autonomous Once Learned Description: Allows the practitioner to move with extreme speed. Downside: Amateur our out-of-practice users may become exhausted very quickly with extended use. Name: Shiroimitsu (White Nectar) State: Shikai, Bankai Terms of Usage: The sheathed sword (right hand when in Bankai) is pointed to direct the petals. Description: White petals, filled with absorbed Reishi, are applied to wounded areas of the body, and allow the Reishi to flow into the body, allowing near instantaneous healing. Downside: There needs to be a source from which the petals absorb Reishi.  If there is none in the environment, Reishi from another spiritual being may be used.  Also, introducing Reishi into the body too quickly can have negative effects, and may damage the body further.  This ability cannot be used for resurrection, as souls from the Soul Society are sent to the World of the Living upon death, and vice versa, the soul is no longer inhabiting the body. Name: Kuroiba (Black Blade) State: Shikai, Bankai Terms of Usage: The sheathed sword (left hand when in Bankai) is pointed to direct the petals. Description: Black petals are sent flying at the target.  When they strike, they absorb Reishi of the target, causing lacerations at the stricken areas. Downside: The petals can only absorb a relatively small amount of Reishi.  If their capacity is reached, they automatically turn white and explode.  If all of the petals are destroyed, Ryomen no Bara will revert to her sealed state, and cannot be unsealed until she regenerates. Name: Barasono Gisei (Rose Garden Sacrifice) State: Bankai Terms of Usage: Koizumi steps on the pommel of Sodaina Barasono, pushing the entirety of the katana into the ground. Description: A mass of thorned vines ensnare the target as it is engulfed in black rose petals, slashing the target and draining it of its Reishi.  The petals turn white and explode around the target on all sides. Downside: This technique is costly, as it will cause Sodaina Barasono to revert to her sealed state until she can regenerate her petals.  If the target is fast enough, it may be able to avoid the tendrils, rendering this one-off attack useless until Koizumi can retrieve his Zanpakuto. Creation Notes: Whew, this took me a total of about ten hours to complete, but I feel like I did a thorough job. -One thing I'm not sure of is the format of the RP sample.  I feel like I wrote more as though I was writing a book, rather than an RP post, but we can work on that. -I tried not to make my Zanpakuto too OP, but I'm not sure if it still is or not.  I wanted to enforce more severe drawbacks to using offensive abilities to complement the character's reluctance to use it in the first place, but powerful if the situation arises. -Also is it okay to just insert Ren into the 4th Division or will that involve part of the story?  I'm not too sure what would be the appropriate course to take in terms of the storyline.

     

       

So far I can't seem to find anything that's wrong. Everything seems really detailed and well written. The format of the RP sample is a bit different from how I would RP but everyone here has a different style. As lone as we can follow it it shouldn't be a problem. You can always look at other people's posts to see how they rp.

-Division wise I think it's fine, the captains not around tho so you'll just be a random rank in the 4th.

If no one else can find a problem i give it a [1/2] APPROVED.

2/2 approved. Enjoy roleplaying :)