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    Post by Loli Gaga Mon Dec 01, 2008 3:16 pm

    Got bored, so i wrote something..

    Amy inspired WOOT.

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    Post by Kambly Mon Dec 01, 2008 3:23 pm

    *blinks* Omg, you improved! xD

    I don't see any Amy in it. How could it be Amy-inspired? D:

    A few more details and this could be near perfect.

    Hm...why does this remind me of sleeping beauty? xD
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    Post by Loli Gaga Mon Dec 01, 2008 3:26 pm

    WAHAHA, well it the flying thing that inspired me, so basically, the fly thing is amy.

    haha, just wrote it last night, was uber bored. ima add more details when my brain grows back. ^^

    who knows.. maybe it is sleeping beauty...
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    Post by Kambly Mon Dec 01, 2008 3:30 pm

    LOL. If it is Sleeping Beauty, then Disney is going to sue you. And I don't think that they'll accept BD cash.

    XD Well, okay, I was expecting myself to be the main character or something.

    I realised that I'm not cold hearted, and I'm not every man's desire. Haha. I'm not so tragic either.
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    Post by Loli Gaga Mon Dec 01, 2008 3:39 pm

    HAHAHA, yeah. you're not that.

    but flying inspired me, so yeah, woot.

    who would ever wanna fight disney, ZOMG. i wouldnt wanna be that person lol.


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    Post by Kambly Mon Dec 01, 2008 4:40 pm

    Hm, this chapter was okay, but it's too short to be a chapter, if you know what I mean.

    Aaanyway. Very intresting story you got here. Is it a tragic love story? lol.
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    Post by Loli Gaga Mon Dec 01, 2008 4:46 pm

    WAHAHA, i did say it was short.

    hmmm... ok next chapter. got worst, was sleepy, but ima fix that.

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    Post by Kambly Mon Dec 01, 2008 4:56 pm

    Very good, very mysterious. Just don't prolong the mysteriousness, sometimes it can get irritating.

    When you edit it, add in a few more details, because, when I read it, I only see actions, there's no colour in it.

    Use your words to paint my world.
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    Post by Loli Gaga Mon Dec 01, 2008 5:06 pm

    LOL!

    colors..

    to bad this is a black and white storry. ^^

    but ima make something up ^^
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    Post by Kambly Mon Dec 01, 2008 5:09 pm

    What I meant was, I can only see this faceless person doing things with kinda incomplete objects. While you can see and imagine these things, others may not.

    So you really really really need details.

    I'm a bit harsh. XD

    Good luck on writing the rest of it. ^_^
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    Post by Loli Gaga Mon Dec 01, 2008 5:22 pm

    HAHA, yeah good point i realized that too, i forgot i was the writer. hmm, i write to amus my self sometimes, now its time to let others read.. KK

    ma fix that later, thank you amy, your not harsh at all.

    but first another short chapter.

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    Post by Kambly Mon Dec 01, 2008 5:36 pm

    Lol, there's been an improvement. I won't talk about details anymore. XD You know what to do.
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    Post by Nance Tue Dec 23, 2008 5:56 pm

    I only read the 1st and second chapter.. Imma conitnue reading it next time. *Is having eye seizures*

    Interesting story so far.. The girl.. I find her crazy.. talking to stuffs XD
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    Post by Loli Gaga Mon Dec 29, 2008 12:38 pm

    I changed the girls name to Bridgette, i do have awesome reasons, but i wont spoil it gah, should written the whole demn thing first before posting >.<

    plus i edited the 3rd chapter.

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    Post by Loli Gaga Mon Dec 29, 2008 12:41 pm

    just finished writing the 5th chapter last night, gaah, i phail in this.

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    Post by Elli-sama Mon Dec 29, 2008 3:14 pm

    A little bit of tweaking here and there, but a good idea to build on. O:

    I think this would be really good as prose with a bit more detail and such. 8D

    AWW. I remember high school and the novel-phase we all went through.
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    Post by Loli Gaga Mon Dec 29, 2008 8:02 pm

    Nyahahaha, mother, i don't do details >.<

    i'm to... plain. XD

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