Galleon Strelitzia [8th Division HQ] (Duplicate thread for RP)

Eh... I think I need to edit my abilities as well. I just realize I don't have much attacks. XD

(OOC: "haha! Give me a chance to get a word in guys..lol Nah good job so far. Listen, don't add anything now, use what you have, because between you both you have everything you need to win. The key is to take into account factors like what's going on around you, the environment, which I'll show you an example of in my post because it was in my plan anyway, and how you can use these things against me. And I'm not going to tell you outright, but I've been hinting at it, together you guys have one HUGE power you have yet to use together; you just need to see it. ;) )

Haha... Sorry! I though you need time gather your speritual energy so we have planty of time. Yeah, I'll stop doing all the actions before your move from now on. XD Don’t worry, I wouldn’t edit my abilities until after this battle. But due to this battle I realize how few attacks I have. Oh and thanks for the hint! ;) And Nachos, yes we really need to come up with some attacks for the crusniks after this.

(OOC: this is what a Maelstrom looks like; it's a massive whirlpool that continues to grow. It's an occurrence that happens off of the coast of Scandinavia (Norway/Sweden) that is caused by wind fronts converging in the sea, near the center of an island group. the word is Nordic meaning "Mael: To grind" and "Strom: Current" translated literally as "Grinding Current")

(OOC: Excellent fight guys! Now you just have one challenge left; to get away before the extremely flammable Hydrogen gets you. Now that we have come to an end, and it turned out to be a good one actually, I'm going to tell you what I meant earlier about working together with your one GREAT power. You both have half of a devastating attack; Emma can freeze things and Nachos has fire. I was wanting to see if you guys would use them together, and it came very close once. If Emma Froze something then Nachos hit it with fire immediately, it would do massive unavoidable damage. But none-the-less, good show! Now I look forward to seeing how you get away.

Also to give you an update on things; reaper and Afscheid are having a one on one showdown that's drawing to an end; Himono Tenshi is attacking the 3rd and the VC is there to fight; Mitsukai is battling Panda-Chan and sasuke in the Vizard HQ; and Hina and Sanba have found the secret to getting into the barrier, and are currently looking for the temple and Haji. Although they are about to get a big surprise.

Once you are done, you can feel free to move around to other locations, as we are just getting started with things; but remember; anyone can attack anywhere.)

I was actually thinking abt doing that, or me and emma combining our water and flame attks to create scorching hot and blinding steam, but emma wanted to try this 1st, and apparently it workedXD, funny lil fact, this was our very 1st RP battle, not bad huh?XD and thanx a lot for all the praise!

Thanks Cerrado, it’s a great battle. I really learn from you and from this battle. I never thought I would able to battle in the first place. And yeah, Nachos and I were planning to use the method you planned. But I was afraid you would use Nachos’ flame attack to neutralize my attack. Then I would waste an attack so I figure I should try this first. XD But if this fails that would be our back up plan. Again, thank you for the great battle, its awesome! And Nachos, I wouldn’t have done it without you’re support. Thanks, and you just couldn’t stop making me laugh. This battle wouldn’t be as fun without your foolishness. Now, I wanna hear that fan girl scream again! XD

Yeah, thx a lot for the great battle, emma I would've died on the 1st page if not for u, and I'm not doing the fangirl scream! *pouting*

(OOC: I am glad you both had a great time! And being someone who has RPed a lot, I want to tell you this with all honesty; for first timers, that was one of the best conducts of battle I've seen. There are a lot of mistakes I notice in first timers, one being the inability to determine one's own level and drift in and out of god moding; another being the inability to use realistic attacks, which by that I mean, not just moves that can occur in a fantasy world, but ones that make no sense at all because they defy any type of logic. You guys did a great job handling yourselves on both of those issues, as well as others.

The only piece of advice I can offer you is posting. Sometimes you both would post twice before i could, which having Rped in places I have, i can work over that, so it's not that big of a deal. The only reason you want to avoid it is sometimes, especially in the case where it's 2 or more on 1, you can launch a variety of attacks for me to avoid all at once, and sometimes they will get over looked, because it's just to hard to realize who is doing what. What i do if you notice, is that no matter how long I had to wait, I never posted before both of you did, after my last post. That's how turn based Rping works. But like I said that's not a big deal in this case, really just future reference.

one other thing is adding previously undeveloped moves or abilities. Now in this battle, I really had no problem with it because i had studied your zanpakutos really well, so I knew that since they hadn't been used, they were limited. I was perfectly ok with you creating new things, because I wanted you to develop out your zanpakutos further, for the future. But keep in mind some people get upset about that; by that I mean, when a battle starts, abilities are locked until it is over. As for me, I'm glad you could expand your arsenal out and I hope I helped you develop something useful for future fights.

Now keep in mind, these points aren't negative criticism, they are just good things to know. I've very proud at how you handled yourselves. On another Bleach site, I used to run a boot camp to train rpers, and they way i did it was to assign participates a scenario, or if more advanced let them develop their own, and once they finished, read it over and give pointers, so basically that is what I'm doing here.

and Emma you are right to think about me turning the attack back on you; no matter how great something is, 90% of the time there is a counter, if you can think of it. The fact you two were thinking that far ahead speaks volumes. But, in this case, I would not have, solely because this was a battle i was going to lose anyway. I just wanted to see how you would write the story, so carried it on to see how you would handle the challenge, and you guys did great.

Now this isn't the end, for this situation or the whole of the RP. You saved yourself at the bottom, so you've escaped the flames, but you still must get away; never leave anything undone. As for the RP as a whole, you must decide where to go and what to do next. There is still more going on, however, my advice is not to just pick somewhere randomly; think about it as if you were really in this situation; you've been here in the 8th so long, you would have no idea what has happened elsewhere, even though I've been telling you out of character to keep you informed. Where you go next should be somewhere you think, in character, you should go to get more information. That is how you RP a great story!)

Thanks Cerrodo, your feedback is actually very helpful. I wouldn’t see it as criticism. Like I said, I learn how to battle from this mission and from you. So your information is very helpful to us. I am looking forward to battling you again in the future. You are such a great opponent and instructor. :)